Draft of Growth Process Essay

Edison Enciso

Professor Bailey

English 120-016

22 Set 2014

Post draft two of Growth Essay

Legalization of Marijuana

When some people try to do something that they usually do not use to do it, then they look for some stimulants, and these stimulants could be coffee, liquor, cigarette or others. As some people need to stay up late, they normally drink coffee, or as some people that are in party need to be more exited or happiness, they normally drink alcoholic beverage or smock cigarette. The excessive consumption of products with caffeine, nicotine, ethyl alcohol, or ethanol produce impairment on the health whose consume; however, the consumptions of these products are legal in our country. If alcohol and tobacco-unhealthy and dangerous products- are legal, why is still is marijuana still illegal?

Marijuana, its botanical name -Cannabis sativa,- is a product of the plant that contains more than 400 chemicals, having as its principal active component the THC (delta-9-tetrahydrocannabinol) that is a psychoactive ingredient. Use of marijuana changes the way of how the brain works, and has effects such as impaired short-term memory, making it difficult to retain and learn information, slowed reaction time, affecting driving skills, altered judgment and decision, increased heart rate by 20-100%, and altered mood leading to euphoria, calmness or in high doses anxiety, paranoia. You will want to follow up with this since it makes marajuana sound really bad and works against your argument.           

Although marijuana is banned in the most states of this country, its demand is increasing. For many years the marijuana has been considered for the department of Drug Enforcement Administration as a Schedule I, use period or semi-colon this means marijuana is a substance that has no approved medical use and has a high potential for abuse. Currently the marijuana is classified in the same level of drugs as heroine and Lysergic acid diethylamide (LSD), even it It is considered more harmful than morphine and cocaine. However, despite being considered as harmful substance, many people consume marijuana. According to National Institute on Drug Abuse in Nationwide Trends, we can appreciate the tendency of marijuana and other illegal substances (see fig. 1). Since 2002 to 2007, there is a tendency decreasing and whereas since 2007 to 2012, there is a tendency increasing perceptual of 1.5% that is equivalent to 4.5 million of people that consume marijuana. This is a very confusingly worded sentence

Fig. 1     Marijuana use has increased since 2007. In 2012, there were 18.9 million current (past-month) users—about 7.3 percent of people aged 12 or older—up from 14.4 million (5.8 percent) in 2007.

Being considered a prohibited substance, the marijuana is commercialized in the black market. The existence of trafficker of drugs is due to a great demand of marijuana. For this reason, governments invest a lot of money in the fight against traffickers and their whole chain of commercialization. This investment also include to collateral effects that produce the consumption of marijuana as treatment, rehabilitation, and others. However, if the marijuana is considered legal, then government could better control the system of commercialization. For example, what happen with cigarette that is legal but the government with taxes and advertising has achieved to reduce the consumption of this. When there is demand of a product in a market, always there will be a supplier; therefore, it is time to legalize the marijuana.

Interesting and time-relevent topic, Encisco. I believe this last sentence here would really serve as an argument/thesis statement. In other words, your argument needs to come sooner. You also need to work on certain grammar elements and, most importantly, sentence-level phrasing. My suggestion is to take future papers to the Reading & Writing Center (416 Hunter West) to go over with a tutor before you turn them in as final drafts.